An example of Persuasive Writing, a focus for the last three weeks.

Dear Mr Ellis (Principal)

Over the last two terms and last year, many of my classmates and friends have complained about the compulsory Havelock North Intermediate footwear. After experience with both types of footwear worn over the year I can show you that this rule must be changed.

Roman Sandals are uncomfortable and scratchy, and allow sweat to build up beneath your feet, leading to shoe damage and other injuries. Every pair falls apart within two to three months. This means you have to buy at least three new pairs a year. After constant use the sole of the sandal also begins to wear, leaving crumbs of the sole stuck between your toes. I can assure you that everyone in my class agrees that Roman Sandals are a waste of money and need to be replaced by a more sturdy but light shoe. Sneakers would be a good change because they release sweat and do not need a replacement until you grow out of them.

Winter shoes are a pain. The thick sole is heavy and makes it uncomfortable to walk. After being used the leather rips and they no longer have the smart look they had when you bought them. I think that kids walking around with damaged footwear really reflects poorly on the school. This rule must be changed. During assemblies the edges of the shoes dig into your leg, forcing you to either hold up your legs or come out with red painful marks on your legs. Your fingers feel extremely sore when you are tying up your laces on a freezing morning or a cold day.

Doctors, students and parents all say that our compulsory footwear is bad. From having super thick heavy soles to having your foot resting on a flat piece of leather with a blade in it I am sure this rule needs to be changed. The sandals are flat encouraging you to walk flat footed and can give you achilles tendon damage.  

I hope you understand that making a change to the footwear will really improve the smart look of the school and help reduce rashes and blisters. Think about how parents react when their child comes home with marks over their legs. Every student I have asked has told me that changing the compulsory footwear is for the best.

Kind Regards,

James Heffernan Room 10  

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